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Post by Memorie on May 16, 2006 17:34:39 GMT -5
Hey Lily!! It is totally cool with us to have T'sum transfer to Sodalis.
But we really really really need a good good good reason for him to. Like, ultra-super-sticky-sweet good.
Let me know if you need some help!
<3
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Post by Memorie on Apr 29, 2006 19:45:15 GMT -5
Eh, I like it. It's wierd to say this to an admin type folk but...
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Post by Memorie on Apr 29, 2006 15:06:04 GMT -5
*nods* Very nice. Short, simple, and sweet, with the proper amount of detail.
You're a player after my own heart, I can tell.
*pulls out the green stamp*
Approved!
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Post by Memorie on Mar 18, 2006 21:44:09 GMT -5
Sweet! Well, alright then. *winks* Maybe I will myself create a sailor of the sea-faring variety soon. *winks*
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Post by Memorie on Mar 18, 2006 20:22:32 GMT -5
*shrugs* I dunno if you've had time to fix anything, but I think it looks good now.
Uhm, I hate to burst any sea bubbles you might have, but there will absolutely always be a lot of sailors (men) who would never in a million years take her on their ships. It sounds wierd, yeah, but some superstitions survived the trip from Terra and one of them is that it's bad luck to have a woman aboard a ship. No m atter how skilled she is. So...it'll probably make for lotsa interesting "hate" threads, but I wanted you to know.
Either way...I approve. Let's see what Dizzy says next time she's on.
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Post by Memorie on May 23, 2006 21:57:24 GMT -5
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Post by Memorie on May 10, 2006 20:30:52 GMT -5
*Rubs her chin* Hmmm...*pretends to be thinking very hard* Hmmm.... Nope!
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Post by Memorie on May 10, 2006 12:03:50 GMT -5
Hi! Welcome to LW! I'm Memorie, but you can call me Mem, if you're into petnames. *shakes Infin's hand excitedly*
Let's see here...describe Dulin's relationship with each of his family members. Did he and his dad compete for Dulin's mum's affections ever? Did they get along? Just a sentence or two will be great.
"Two years after she contracted the disease, Dulin’s mother passed away. It was such a shock to the whole family; it had been coming for years." ~If the death had been coming for years, why was it such a shock to the family? *thinks of Patil Parvati, her dead rabbit and Hermione*
"Dulin was 20...when he walked the tables...." ~Twenty is very young to be a journeyman, and you describe as feeling mediocre. Was he really mediocre, or is there a reason for him walking the tables at such a young age? Most men are at least twenty-seven before they are even considered knowledgable enough on the subject to walk.
"(except for that smidgen of his dignity.)" ~Periods go outside parenthesis.
I really like this character. I can't wait to see what sort of trouble him and Kaminari get into together that makes Merda go: 0.o
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Post by Memorie on Apr 29, 2006 19:46:49 GMT -5
Oh! *nods* Yup
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Post by Memorie on Mar 18, 2006 20:12:32 GMT -5
Looks good to me. *smiles* Welcome to LW!
<3 Mem
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Mowena
Jun 4, 2006 14:57:59 GMT -5
Post by Memorie on Jun 4, 2006 14:57:59 GMT -5
HAHAHAHA! I beat her to it! Mwahaha!
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Mowena
Jun 3, 2006 15:57:46 GMT -5
Post by Memorie on Jun 3, 2006 15:57:46 GMT -5
*opens her eyes wide* No, I wasn't saying that. And I've never seen that movie. *grins* I was just too lazy to pull up photobucket.
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Mowena
Jun 3, 2006 14:43:13 GMT -5
Post by Memorie on Jun 3, 2006 14:43:13 GMT -5
Right on. Throw that bit about tomboyishness and that being whys he doesn't feel so much in there. That's good. After you do that, I approve it. *is to lazy to go get the stamp and candy*
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Mowena
Jun 3, 2006 13:25:53 GMT -5
Post by Memorie on Jun 3, 2006 13:25:53 GMT -5
Okey day then. Sounds good, actually, I was gonna suggest that too. Great minds think alike! *grins*
And as long you understand that, I don't have a problem approving her...soon as I read over the bio. Which I'll do now.
If she's Searched for candidacy, she won't have the runner anymore. Candidates aren't allowed them.
Gold is not a common color on Pern and is very hard to make. I don't think that as a holder's daughter and a candidate to boot, she'd have the kind of cash to buy them...unless she's got a secret. Same with the boots--they're still kinda expensive.
Why doesn't she ever cry or anything like that? Why are those things foreign to her? I mean, she can still have had an exceptionally beautiful childhood and still get her feelings hurt. And she's a teenager. You really might want to reconsider that, or have a Fall of a good reason.
If you are saying she held down two jobs before age ten, I'm going to have to disagree with you. Pernese children are encouraged to be children. Two jobs...that would make someone very jaded, no matter how much they liked their work.
"She became the bunt of many jokes...." The phrase is "butt." Not "bunt." Honest mistake.
I think it'll be great after a few tweaks. It's good already.
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Mowena
Jun 3, 2006 2:19:56 GMT -5
Post by Memorie on Jun 3, 2006 2:19:56 GMT -5
I don't have time to look over it further right now, but if you wait until after the jump to play her, she will be too old to be considered eligible for Impressiong. If she's fifteen now, she'll be 22 in seven turns. You can make her a dragonrider, but you won't be able to play her candidate days. The best advice I can give you is to let us Search her soon.
I dunno if you read our explanation on how we feel about Searching female chars...but it is highly unlikely that she will Impress. She may end up too old and a lower caverns woman. But we don't really know; it all depends on how they are played. The only thing I can think of is let us Search her before the jump, play her a little, and then, coming soon (Mid June) switch her age up and just see if we give her anything. We might. We might not. Creating a candidate, and most especially a female candidate, does not guarantee you a dragonling here at LW. Just wait see is all I can say.
And I'll look over the bio more extensively later, k?
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