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Post by hrsegrl245 on Jun 1, 2007 6:44:59 GMT -5
(please delete)
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Drache
Ordered Chaos
aka Ms. Picky
Enchanting my every waking dream...
Posts: 641
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Post by Drache on Jun 2, 2007 15:37:36 GMT -5
Please go through and do capitalization.
In one the paragraphs of his history, you say:
Hanen likes beastcrafters, their records are not as extensive as those on the Northern Continent.
That makes it sound like he doesn’t like reading. Earlier you say he sneaks off to the records’ room whenever he can because he likes reading. Also, Beastcrafter should be capitalized.
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Post by hrsegrl245 on Jun 2, 2007 17:59:51 GMT -5
I'm sure there are a couple more words than need capitalization, but I'm giving the eyes a break. Otherwise it should be better...
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Dizzy
Ordered Chaos
Black Between...
All is Naught...
Save for fragile
Dragonwing
Lead, Follow, or get the Fall outta the Way.
Posts: 928
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Post by Dizzy on Jun 23, 2007 1:51:24 GMT -5
Hatching date 2501
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